Film Draft Essay Format for the VWT
Title is captivating and appealing on a sexy topic.
Are introductory questions easy to write? Yes, if you have a good imagination and know your these statement. By the way, the thesis statement should contain the specific literary element or elements you are analyzing, such as character or plot. Don't forget it should be the last sentence in the introduction.
The second paragraph should begin with a strong topic sentence relating to the thesis in the introduction. The paragraph should be cohesive, meaning it closely link all the sentences using, for example, transition expressions such as although or however. There should be citations too referring to the sources you are using, based on what your teacher explained in class. "You could cite the film, the book, and the film reviews" (Mr. B).
The third paragraph should follow the guidelines explained for the second paragraph. You could refer to things you learned in the class textbook (Introduction).
The conclusion should restate your main idea in a different way. You could also use a citation referring to the film you studied (The Pianist). If you follow these guideline you should get a good assignment score.
Works Cited:
Mr. B, F. Cegep de Saint Laurent, 2019, Montreal, Canada.
Introduction
The Pianist
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Are introductory questions easy to write? Yes, if you have a good imagination and know your these statement. By the way, the thesis statement should contain the specific literary element or elements you are analyzing, such as character or plot. Don't forget it should be the last sentence in the introduction.
The second paragraph should begin with a strong topic sentence relating to the thesis in the introduction. The paragraph should be cohesive, meaning it closely link all the sentences using, for example, transition expressions such as although or however. There should be citations too referring to the sources you are using, based on what your teacher explained in class. "You could cite the film, the book, and the film reviews" (Mr. B).
The third paragraph should follow the guidelines explained for the second paragraph. You could refer to things you learned in the class textbook (Introduction).
The conclusion should restate your main idea in a different way. You could also use a citation referring to the film you studied (The Pianist). If you follow these guideline you should get a good assignment score.
Works Cited:
Mr. B, F. Cegep de Saint Laurent, 2019, Montreal, Canada.
Introduction
The Pianist
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Film Analysis Essay
Assignment score: 56%
Writing quantity
1. You have written 184 words.
2. I count a total of 4 paragraphs.
3. You have written 14 sentences.
4. You have written 1 question.
Writing quality
1. Your average sentence length is 13.14.
2. Your sentence length variance is 5.57.
3. You have written 0 cliché.
4. You have used 0 exclamation mark.
5. You have used 0 first-person pronoun (I, me, my, mine).
Language accuracy: 70%
You have 6 errors.
Score: 70
Feedback: I
detected a significant number of errors in your writing. Do your best
to eliminate any avoidable errors in your writing by rereading your
essay carefully and by using a spell checker and grammar checker. Your score for this feature = 70/100
Your error profile is as follows.
You wrote:...u have a good imagination and know your these statement. By the way, the thesis state...
Feedback: The
word "these" is a determiner for plurals. You probably need the word
"thesis" before the word "statement." "your thesis statement".
Alternatively, remove the word "your" and use a plural. "these
statements"
Suggestion: your thesis statement, these statements
You wrote:... should be cohesive, meaning it closely link all the sentences using, for example, t...
Feedback: You have a problem with your verb agreement. The pronoun "it" must be used with a third-person verb: "links". (VA201)
Suggestion: links
You wrote:...onclusion should restate your main idea in a different way. You could also use a citation referrin...
Feedback: Consider replacing "in a different way" with the adverb for "different"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
Suggestion:
You wrote:...tion referring to the film you studied (The Pianist). If you follow these guideline...
Feedback: You
have capitalized a word that does not normally need to be capitalized
mid-sentence (the). Revise: "the Pianist". The capitalization rule from
"The Guardian Style Guide" gives the following advice: Use lowercase
"the" for newspapers (the Guardian), magazines (the New Statesman), pubs
(the Coach and Horses), bands (the Black Eyed Peas), nicknames (the
Hulk, the Red Baron), and sports grounds (the Oval). Use uppercase "The"
for books (The Lord of the Rings), films (The Matrix), poems (The Waste
Land), television shows (The West Wing), and place names (The Hague).
If in doubt, put quotation marks around the whole name.
Suggestion: the Pianist
You wrote:... to the film you studied (The Pianist). If you follow these guideline you should g...
Feedback: Where
is your comma? There does not seem to be one in this sentence. Separate
your if-clause from your result-clause with a comma.
Suggestion:
You wrote:...ou studied (The Pianist). If you follow these guideline you should get a good assignm...
Feedback: The
word "guideline" is singular, so you cannot use the plural determiner
"these". Did you mean "this guideline" or "these guidelines"?
Suggestion: this guideline, these guidelines
Essay structure and content: 51%
Introduction: 46%
| Opening: |
I noticed that you started your essay with a question to engage the reader's attention. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
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| Context: |
Paragraph contains film terms, like plot
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I
checked your introduction for about nine hundred film-related terms to
see if you had provided your reader with some background information to
let your reader know what film your essay is about. I was able to find
only one match. That doesn't seem to me to be enough context for a film
analysis essay. Make sure to mention a few details about the director, cast, release date, or genre. Your score for this feature = 30/100
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| Thesis: |
Thesis contains character, plot
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I
checked your thesis statement for about two dozen literary terms to see
if you are doing a literary analysis of the film you have chosen. I
found two. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
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The
last sentence of your introduction doesn't express an opinion. You can
improve your score for this feature of your essay by strengthening your
claim. Here is an example of a debatable thesis statement that makes a
strong claim: Ridley Scott's Blade Runner was a revolutionary
science-fiction film, both in terms of its use of visual effects and its
masterful transformation of the genre of science-fiction into an art
form. Your score for this feature = 70/100
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First body paragraph: 76%
| Topic sentence: |
The
first sentence of your first body paragraph makes a claim. That's good.
You can improve your score for this feature of your essay by
strengthening your claim. Here is an example of a topic sentence that
makes a strong claim: First, the visual effects of Blade Runner are spectacular. Your score for this feature = 80/100
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| Build cohesion: |
You have used multiple transition words to build cohesion. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100
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| Quote: |
You have reported what other people have said. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
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You have used double quotation marks. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
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| Cite sources: |
You
have not included a citation. That's not good. It is important to
indicate your sources. Speak to your teacher or review the lesson in
your textbook about citing sources to improve your score. Your score for this feature = 0/100
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Second body paragraph: 32%
| Topic sentence: |
The
first sentence of your second body paragraph states a fact without
making a strong claim. To improve your score, make a stronger claim that
you can elaborate on with the rest of the paragraph. For example, you
could write something like this: Second, Ridley Scott's superb movie has transformed science-fiction from escapism into a serious art form. Your score for this feature = 0/100
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| Build cohesion: |
You
have used a transition word to build cohesion. That's good. Use one or
two more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples
of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines,
because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of,
to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a
doubt. Your score for this feature = 60/100
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| Quote: |
Your
second body paragraph is missing something. I expected you to report
comments and reviews by other people, using words like said, wrote,
claimed, etc. You can improve your score by reporting reviews you have
read online that were written by expert film critics. It will lend
credibility to your claims if you can show how experts agree with you. Your score for this feature = 0/100
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You
have not used any double quotation marks in your body paragraph. Use
double quotation marks like this ". (The double quotation mark is a
single symbol. It is not the same as two apostrophes in a row.) Your score for this feature = 0/100
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| Cite sources: |
You have included one citation. That's good. It is important to use and cite at least one source. Cite more for a higher score. Your score for this feature = 100/100
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Conclusion: 66%
| Reformulation of the thesis: |
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 16% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
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The
first sentence of your conclusion doesn't express an opinion. Make a
claim that you can vigorously defend. You can improve your score by
writing a reformulated thesis statement that makes a strong claim, like
this: In conclusion, Blade Runner was ahead of its time in terms of
the visual effects it offered and the way it treated science-fiction as a
form of art. Your score for this feature = 0/100
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| Recommendation: |
The paragraph contains suggestion words like should.
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You
made a recommendation. That's good. It is a good practice in an essay
of this type to recommend a course of action to your reader. Your score for this feature = 100/100
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| Prediction: | |
No
prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if
you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
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Vocabulary: 70%
Film-related words: film, plot, score
Feedback: <font
color="#ff0000">You have used only a few film-industry words. Expect
the minimum score for minimal effort. </font>Your score for this
feature = 60/100
Literary analysis words: character, plot, score
Feedback: You have used three or four literary analysis terms in your essay. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Scholarship: 33%
Works Cited
Title “Works Cited” present: yes
1 works cited found: 33%
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